finish me off

[Geek Grrrl]

Halloweens coming up, yay, and every year the same old stories are told. We all know about the guy & girl that go out in the car, he kisses her but she's scared because theyre in the middle of no where and theres a maniac with a hook for a hand on the loose. He takes her home and discovers a shiney hook on the car door. quite frankly its boring.

we need new stories, or at the very least new endings, so I offer you the task of giving the following story your own ending, it can be as long or as short as you like..


A teenage boy drove his date out to the dark and deserted Lookout Point. He turned on the radio.

‘Oh, I love this song!’ his date purred.

He edged across the seat and leaned over to kiss her.

‘Oh…,’ she said, ‘I don’t know about this, Charlie.’

‘It’s okay…I won’t hurt you…I promise.’

She relented and began kissing him back. Suddenly the music stopped, and a radio announcer cut in: ‘We interrupt this broadcast to inform you that a serial killer has just escaped from the state insane asylum! If you see a man around town who fits his description, you should alert the police immediately! You will be able to identify him because he has a hook in place of his right hand!’

‘Oh, Charlie, I want to go home now!’ the date exclaimed.

‘There’s nothing to be scared of,’ he assured her, and leaned in to kiss her again. She pushed him away. ‘No, Charlie! I want to go home now!’

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear and sped away from Lookout Point. When they arrived at her house, he got out of the car, slammed his door, and went around to her side of the car to let her out…

your turn :)

[Simon]

as he opened the door with his enormous hooked hand his date wondered how the hell she had ever not noticed it in the years they had been together. Or at least she would have thought that if her brains werent pulled out and splatted on the pavement before she managed to.

THE END

No patience for messing about here :D

[Mr stabby]

The thread title is misleading in so many ways......
Isnt this just liek 3 word story thread? But with more words?

[Simon]

You mean a story thread...yes...how observant :p

[Nicodemus]

Mr. Stabby, you just said exactly what I was thinking. A story to finish was the last thing I expected to see.

However, I suppose the thread title was effective in getting in me to read it, huh? Also, it seems Simon has killed the idea. Thanks, Simon. :p

[Soapie]

The door was a little stiff, but it'd been like that for a long while. Charlie knew he should've gotten it fixed long ago, but sufficent free time had never manifested itself. Stephanie swung her fish-net encased legs around and out of the car onto the suburban road. She and Charlie walked around the car and along the footpath to his front door, hand in hand. A car rushed past impatiently behind them, travelling toward Lookout Point.

His bedroom was a little cramped, but that suited the current situation, Stephanie felt safe within this castle of the suburbs. Charlie lay on his bed and brought Stephanie down upon him and the two engaged in a long kiss, feeling safe and seperated from the hideous world outside of the window.

Hours later, the two awoke from a night that they would never forget. A special event had occured, they thought together as they scanned each others faces happily.

'Would you like something to eat?' asked Charlie.

'Erm, have you got any Fruit Loops?'

'Sure.'

Charlie skipped along the landing and slid down the bannister - a technique which he had perfected - before heading for the kitchen. He opened the cupboard in which the cereal was kept. It was filled with blood and ruptured cardboard. Suddenly, Charlie realized that he and Steph and misheard the previous night's news report...

I am so sorry :(

[Simon]

Mr. Stabby, you just said exactly what I was thinking. A story to finish was the last thing I expected to see.

However, I suppose the thread title was effective in getting in me to read it, huh? Also, it seems Simon has killed the idea. Thanks, Simon. :p

Well, when it says finish me off I do what I'm told :p

I aim to please

[Stringy Pete]

Charlie lent over and opened the door of the car causing the Engine-warmed air, slick with the smell of his dates perfume, to rush out roughly like an autumn breeze. He reached to take her hand to assist her exit from the vehicle like a chivalrous knight of old.
"Let me help you with that"
Longing to feel the warm touch of skin on skin, he was mortified when he felt the deathly cold of a metal hook cross his palm.
"What the?!?!"
"Don't be alarmed Charlie"
She lunged at Charlie's wrist, slicing a gash across his arteries
"ARRRGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH!"
Escaping his mouth with the anguish of a thousand tortured souls, his scream caused a smile to cross the cold blooded killers face
"If you're lucky someone will alert an ambulance. That is, if they heard you scream. Thanks for the ride"
And with that she slammed the door shut and shuffled over to the drivers seat and sped off into the night.

Charlie tried in vain to stem the tide, gushing from his wrist, the dam that was his skin had broken, and there was no stopping this flood.
Falling back, spent, life ebbing from his body, he could hear the distant wail of sirens coming to his aid. As he slipped into darkness, he could still taste her lipstick from that stolen kiss on Lookout point.
"Heh, a kiss to die for...."

[Glitch]

The car collapsed and fell down a cliff and they screamed as they both fell to their horrible bloody death.

[Stringy Pete]

Ok, I've revised my first attempt, tell me if it's any better gramatically, and in terms of continuity and substance. My proof readers, editor, publicist, and parakeet all disapproved of the afformentioned work.

And they all lived happily ever after

Feedback on a postcard to the usual address.

[Smartie]

"finish Me off"....

Thread does not deliver...... <me and my dirty mind>

[Nicodemus]

Wait... I thought the posts were supposed to be in succession? In other words, I thought that the next person to post was to add to the story, then the next person add to that, and so on. From what I see, these are all unrelated...

Or am I mistaken on how this is supposed to go?

[LeoZ]

Wait... I thought the posts were supposed to be in succession? In other words, I thought that the next person to post was to add to the story, then the next person add to that, and so on. From what I see, these are all unrelated...


no, the task is to finish the story off with your own ending.

[Yorkshire Tea]

A teenage boy drove his date out to the dark and deserted Lookout Point. He turned on the radio.

‘Oh, I love this song!’ his date purred.

He edged across the seat and leaned over to kiss her.

‘Oh…,’ she said, ‘I don’t know about this, Charlie.’

‘It’s okay…I won’t hurt you…I promise.’

She relented and began kissing him back. Suddenly the music stopped, and a radio announcer cut in: ‘We interrupt this broadcast to inform you that a serial killer has just escaped from the state insane asylum! If you see a man around town who fits his description, you should alert the police immediately! You will be able to identify him because he has a hook in place of his right hand!’

‘Oh, Charlie, I want to go home now!’ the date exclaimed.

‘There’s nothing to be scared of,’ he assured her, and leaned in to kiss her again. She pushed him away. ‘No, Charlie! I want to go home now!’

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear and sped away from Lookout Point. When they arrived at her house, he got out of the car, slammed his door, and went around to her side of the car to let her out…

When all of a sudden they were confronted by a man going 'Parp parp' and brandishing a knife, with which he ate their spleen.

The end.

[Nicodemus]

no, the task is to finish the story off with your own ending.

Oh, okay then. My mistake. I didn't read all of the original post and saw Mr. Stabby mention something about the 3-word story game, which when played at other forums I go to, builds in succession with each post. :eng101:

Sorry to break up the thread. Please continue.

[Snave]

A teenage boy drove his date out to the dark and deserted Lookout Point. He turned on the radio.

‘Oh, I love this song!’ his date purred.

He edged across the seat and leaned over to kiss her.

‘Oh…,’ she said, ‘I don’t know about this, Charlie.’

‘It’s okay…I won’t hurt you…I promise.’

She relented and began kissing him back. Suddenly the music stopped, and a radio announcer cut in: ‘We interrupt this broadcast to inform you that a serial killer has just escaped from the state insane asylum! If you see a man around town who fits his description, you should alert the police immediately! You will be able to identify him because he has a hook in place of his right hand!’

‘Oh, Charlie, I want to go home now!’ the date exclaimed.

‘There’s nothing to be scared of,’ he assured her, and leaned in to kiss her again. She pushed him away. ‘No, Charlie! I want to go home now!’

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear and sped away from Lookout Point. When they arrived at her house, he got out of the car, slammed his door, and went around to her side of the car to let her out…

When they got out of the car his date looked around

'whats wrong he said'

'Ive got a little secret' she whisperd

'Well you can tell me'

She began to unzip her skin, thats when he began to realise, that this wasnt his dream girl, but a monster, and not only a monster, but a vampire. He stepped back, fear in his eyes and with one fair swoop the vampire slit his throat with his razor sharp teeth.

The vampire dined on his brains and eat them with a spork :P

The End

[Youlikeyams?]

A teenage boy drove his date out to the dark and deserted Lookout Point. He turned on the radio.

‘Oh, I love this song!’ his date purred.

He edged across the seat and leaned over to kiss her.

‘Oh…,’ she said, ‘I don’t know about this, Charlie.’

‘It’s okay…I won’t hurt you…I promise.’

She relented and began kissing him back. Suddenly the music stopped, and a radio announcer cut in: ‘We interrupt this broadcast to inform you that a serial killer has just escaped from the state insane asylum! If you see a man around town who fits his description, you should alert the police immediately! You will be able to identify him because he has a hook in place of his right hand!’

‘Oh, Charlie, I want to go home now!’ the date exclaimed.

‘There’s nothing to be scared of,’ he assured her, and leaned in to kiss her again. She pushed him away. ‘No, Charlie! I want to go home now!’

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear and sped away from Lookout Point. When they arrived at her house, he got out of the car, slammed his door, and went around to her side of the car to let her out…

And she opened the door herself.

"I can do things myself you know!"
She looked annoyed - exasperated even.

"Okay - I was just gonna help", Charlie said, looking a bit terrified that this girl was in such a ditty about a car door.

"BLARGEN!"

In a slash, the date was dead. Zekey ate her brains. Charlie ate Zekey.

End.

[Ouch!]

ive got that spamming e-mail piece of carp about eleventeen times now. You left out the obligatory "If you dont send this to 49 and a half people in three seconds, YOUR brakes will fail causing your car to be wrapped around a 22 foot high oak tree in which you will be thrown from your car causing you death, permanent brain damage or near-fatal injuries. Alternatively, you will never have sex or have bad luck"

If this is a halloween thread, talk about something halloweenish, like what are people going to dress up as? ive 3 ideas. Help! Bear in mind that the club im going to is giving free drink all night to whoever has the most random idea. Don't ask how i intend to go as these, its all planned out...

HENCE:
1. A shower
2. A Bag of Dog food
3. Get one of those little plastic kiddie cars (the red and yellow ones) which they sit in and write Po-Lice on it and go as the police.

[Meadow]

...when Leonard Nimoy stepped out of the shadows.

'Greetings,' he said, and promptly exploded.

When the boy and his date had cleaned off the ruptured spleen from their clothes, they sat down and watched Cow and Chicken, which, for some reason, was on TV at 1 AM. (probably to entice drug addicts) The boy smiled at his date, who turned round and opened her mouth slowly.

Suddenly, an enormous spider flew out of her mouth, clinging to the boy's face and making odd moaning sounds.

'Oh, God, I am so sorry, that happens all the time...' the girl mumbled, scooping the spider back up into her ear.

The boy blinked.

Then William Shatner exploded.

[McFrenzy]

Halloweens coming up, yay, and every year the same old stories are told. We all know about the guy & girl that go out in the car, he kisses her but she's scared because theyre in the middle of no where and theres a maniac with a hook for a hand on the loose. He takes her home and discovers a shiney hook on the car door. quite frankly its boring.

we need new stories, or at the very least new endings, so I offer you the task of giving the following story your own ending, it can be as long or as short as you like..


A teenage boy drove his date out to the dark and deserted Lookout Point. He turned on the radio.

‘Oh, I love this song!’ his date purred.

He edged across the seat and leaned over to kiss her.

‘Oh…,’ she said, ‘I don’t know about this, Charlie.’

‘It’s okay…I won’t hurt you…I promise.’

She relented and began kissing him back. Suddenly the music stopped, and a radio announcer cut in: ‘We interrupt this broadcast to inform you that a serial killer has just escaped from the state insane asylum! If you see a man around town who fits his description, you should alert the police immediately! You will be able to identify him because he has a hook in place of his right hand!’

‘Oh, Charlie, I want to go home now!’ the date exclaimed.

‘There’s nothing to be scared of,’ he assured her, and leaned in to kiss her again. She pushed him away. ‘No, Charlie! I want to go home now!’

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear and sped away from Lookout Point. When they arrived at her house, he got out of the car, slammed his door, and went around to her side of the car to let her out…

your turn :)

I am going back a bit but you will see why;

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear, he stalls the car.
A side glance to his date reveals a look not worth arguing with.
He turns the key again expecting the engine to burst into life but nothing, as the engine drones over and over his dates expression becomes one of severity.

Charlie - "I don't know whats wrong with it"
Lucy - "Charlie just sort it out I want to go home.....NOW!"

Charlie tries the ignition again this time a new whirring sound accompanies the drone.

Charlie - "I'll have to go and get help, theres a garage down the lane I might be able to get the mechanic to come and have a look"

Charlie fishes behind his seat for his coat just as the heavens open with a heavy downpour.

Charlie - "Great that's all I need!"
Lucy - "Just hurry up Charlie this isn't very funny!" Lucy turns her back on him.

Charlie shrugs and gets out of the car, within a few feet he has disappeared in the rain leaving Lucy alone in the car. She locks her door and sits uncomfortably in the darkness. For company she turns the radio channel and finds herself listening to a local rock station.
There is a thud against the side of the car and Lucy jumps with fright.

"Charlie you idiot that is not funny! she turns the radio up louder and leans across to lock his door "That'll teach him" she mutters.
She hears another thud this time from the roof of the car, she thumps the roof and turns the radio up even louder.

Suddenly the radio channel breaks into a newsflash;

News Reader - "Police have followed the trail of the escapee and believe he is near Lookout Point, Police warn travellers to avoid the area and if there not to approach anyone they see" the bulletin ends and the music comes back on.

Another thump from the roof this time Lucy is starting to get worried, she tries to look out of the car but the rain is coming down heavier and is making visibility poor. Behind her lights begin to travel up the hill, It must be Charlie she thinks. They stop a few yards behind the car and the yellow headlamps are joined by flashing blue and red lights, Lucy is confused.

Lucy turns down the radio and turns around in her seat, a burst of static makes her jump.

Voice "Passenger in the car please exit your vehicle and run this way, Do not look behind back just keep running towards us you will be perfectly safe"

Lucy looks towards the roof and swallows hard, The Escaped Madman?, she exits the car and runs through the rain toward the flashing lights, as she nears a policeman moves from behind the lights he reaches out towards her as he takes hold of her she turns to see what the thumping was, frozen in the lights is the escaped madmen covered in blood with a frenzied look on his face, in one hand where a hand should be is a silver hook in the other hand is Charlies head!

I must admit the title of the thread did make me read but like some of the others a dirty mind took hold first ;)

[argh]

A teenage boy drove his date out to the dark and deserted Lookout Point. He turned on the radio.

‘Oh, I love this song!’ his date purred.

He edged across the seat and leaned over to kiss her.

‘Oh…,’ she said, ‘I don’t know about this, Charlie.’

‘It’s okay…I won’t hurt you…I promise.’

She relented and began kissing him back. Suddenly the music stopped, and a radio announcer cut in: ‘We interrupt this broadcast to inform you that a serial killer has just escaped from the state insane asylum! If you see a man around town who fits his description, you should alert the police immediately! You will be able to identify him because he has a hook in place of his right hand!’

‘Oh, Charlie, I want to go home now!’ the date exclaimed.

‘There’s nothing to be scared of,’ he assured her, and leaned in to kiss her again. She pushed him away. ‘No, Charlie! I want to go home now!’

‘Fine, if that’s the way you want it.’ He slid back across the seat, jerked the car into gear and sped away from Lookout Point. When they arrived at her house, he got out of the car, slammed his door, and went around to her side of the car to let her out…

and nothing was wrong.

He then coerced her into sex on the driveway for being suck a scardy cat. Luckily, it didn't take Charlie long to finish, and the neighbours didn't call the cops.

Teh end.

[Nevermore]

How about just..

And Charlie didn't get any.. THE END.

[Geek Grrrl]

i am teh queen of inuendo :p

[McFrenzy]

So can we have another one to finish off please :)